In the past, shopping was a routine domestic task. Many people nowadays regard it as a hobby. To what extent do you think this is a positive trend?

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go shopping as a hobby, while in the past they only did it as a routine task. I completely agree with the statement and believe that we should be more reasonable these days. We have changed a lot since fifty years ago when it was simpler than now. Customers only bought groceries, when they were out of them, necessary products

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as cooking tools and clothes either for work r social events.

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, no one did it for fun or with a certain purpose other than the domestic one. Alternatively,

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now have become more materialistic than before and everyone is paying a lot more attention to buying clothes, decorations or things that we are not in need of. Another big factor is that some

people

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go to retail

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therapy

, which means that when someone is depressed they do it as a way of fixing their mood. Others go shopping to kill time or out of boredom. My opinion is that it is a negative trend. I do not think that purchasing different products is bad, I just believe that there should be balance in

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actions and choices. Keeping that in mind, I feel it is often even worse to use that activity as a way to fix your problems and anxiety, because it can lead to

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addictive behaviour, followed by overspending and getting into loans.

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lady, who broke up with her boyfriend, thereby

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an addiction to shopping and

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she go sad, she bought shoes. In the end , three years later she lost her job, apartment and family. Another factor, because of which I am not keen on going to the shops every day is

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overpopularisation

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over popularisation

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of fast shopping and its causes on the environment. To conclude my opinion on spending considerate time in shops is negative and only justifies with different reasons, when in reality

people

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do it only but of boredom and depression.

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I do believe that there must be a balance in doing

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, so that you do it with pleasure and still not

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overspend

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over spend

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

consumerism
retail therapy
materialism
disposable income
economic growth
financial instability
environmental impact
social interaction
community building
emotional satisfaction
advertising influence
shopping habits

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