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Now a days water and environment related problems are so common. Why do you think that is? DIscuss possible sollutions

#water #environment #sollutions
It is undeniable that
water
 and environmental concerns are always trivial in Bangladesh from the
infrastructure
 design to
implementation
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 of
development
, which may come with severe exposures in the end. The state of
safe
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environment
 depends on optimum
water
 management, hydrological solutions and
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a strategical
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strategical
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infrastructure
development
 approach. To execute these, I believe a higher degree in the related field will prepare me in
integrated
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 way .
Therefore
, I would like to apply for a Master’s
Program
 in
Water
 Resources And
Environment
-WATENV / Tropical Hydrogeology And Environmental Engineering-TropHEE /
Infrastructure
 Planning-MIP starting in winter 2023. I believe my educational, professional and research background would enable me to make a strong contribution
in
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 the graduate
program
 at
the
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Germany University through DAAD Scholarship. In my five years of
civil
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 engineering profession, I
mostly
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involved
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with
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investigation
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 and supervision of
construction
 works. My enthusiasm for understanding the
water
,
environment
, hydrology and
infrastructure
development
 grew in various ways as
construction
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 industry is closely related to
the
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natural systems.
Firstly
, while working below 10-20 meters from the existing ground level it is found that
salinity
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 of
water
 vigorously damages
structure
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 by creating leakages.
Secondly
, most of the time, during bridge
construction
, river direction is always controlled for
construction
 purposes which impacts the subsurface layer of
water
 that led to
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to
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 other areas.
Moreover
, In Bangladesh, the
construction
 work generates several metric tons of surplus debris that affects
environment
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 and
water
 resources. These issues made me anxious to figure out the critical solutions
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 depth knowledge for sustainable
infrastructure
development
. The proposed
program
 will support me to be a specialist at the international level from the planning to design and
development
 stages. Being
the
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 citizen
from
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 a developing country like Bangladesh, it will be a great opportunity to accomplish post-graduate studies
in
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at
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 Germany University with
prestigious
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 DAAD Scholarship. If I am selected for
this
program
, my contribution
for
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 the advancement in
water
,
environment
 and hydrological modelling for resilient
infrastructure
development
 can surpass the ambiguity of these fields.
Thus
, I will be able to outstrip my shortcomings to solve
most
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 prominent contemporary concerns on
water
 and
environment
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 for developing
infrastructure
. I have no doubt that completing
this
 master's degree will provide me with the intellectual knowledge and hands-on abilities that need to succeed as a civil engineer in the coming years.
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