The percentage of obese children in Vietnam has been increasing in recent years. What are the causes and effects of this disturbing trend?

Traditonal
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cooking has been replaced with
fast-foods
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nowadays. 35% of young adults are facing the major issue of obesity in Vietnam and there are various reasons for that. In
this
essay, I will discuss how we can overcome
this
worldwide problem and give some recommendations. The
first
and foremost reason for
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children
childrens
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children
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to get obese is consuming fatty
food
. Parents are busy
in
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their work
whole
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day and they don't give attention
of
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their child's dietary
requirement
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and feed them with whatever is readily
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available
avaialble
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available
.
For example
, instant noodles are considered to be young
adults
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favorite
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food
because they are eating that
for
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every other day.
Moreover
,
kids
tend to eat more chocolates and it has different types of additives which
also
contributes
in
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this
. There are various ways in which
this
problem can be tackled;
firstly
parents should take their
kids
where they can see other children and play with them. Physical activities will not only make
kids
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healthier
healtier
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healthier
but
also
improve their digestion.
Secondly
, pupils should cook
food
at home using different vegetables and meats to maintain vitamin and
nutrients
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levels in their
child
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children
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.
Furthermore
, they should replace sugary
food
items with natural sugar.
For example
, jaggery candies can be used as a sugar replacement for
kids
, instant noodles should be replaced with
popcorns
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and fried
food
with
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. To conclude, obesity is
a
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end result of
series
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of bad dietary habits and
this
chain can be broken
at
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early
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stages of human beings.
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