The percentage of obese children in Vietnam has been increasing in recent years. What are the causes and effects of this disturbing trend?
Traditonal
cooking has been replaced with Correct your spelling
Traditional
fast-foods
nowadays. 35% of young adults are facing the major issue of obesity in Vietnam and there are various reasons for that. In Correct your spelling
fast foods
this
essay, I will discuss how we can overcome this
worldwide problem and give some recommendations.
The first
and foremost reason for Correct your spelling
children
childrens
to get obese is consuming fatty Correct your spelling
children
food
. Parents are busy in
their work Change preposition
with
whole
day and they don't give attention Correct article usage
the whole
of
their child's dietary Change preposition
to
requirement
and feed them with whatever is readily Fix the agreement mistake
requirements
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available
avaialble
. Correct your spelling
available
For example
, instant noodles are considered to be young adults
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adults'
adult's
favorite
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favourite
food
because they are eating that for
every other day. Change preposition
apply
Moreover
, kids
tend to eat more chocolates and it has different types of additives which also
contributes in
Change preposition
to
this
.
There are various ways in which this
problem can be tackled; firstly
parents should take their kids
where they can see other children and play with them. Physical activities will not only make kids
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healthier
healtier
but Correct your spelling
healthier
also
improve their digestion. Secondly
, pupils should cook food
at home using different vegetables and meats to maintain vitamin and nutrients
levels in their Change the noun form
nutrient
child
. Fix the agreement mistake
children
Furthermore
, they should replace sugary food
items with natural sugar. For example
, jaggery candies can be used as a sugar replacement for kids
, instant noodles should be replaced with popcorns
and fried Fix the agreement mistake
popcorn
food
with steamed
.
To conclude, obesity is Change the form of the verb
steam
a
end result of Change the article
an
series
of bad dietary habits and Correct article usage
a series
this
chain can be broken at
Change preposition
in
early
stages of human beings.Correct article usage
the early
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