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With all the problem in the world today spending money on space exploration is a complete waste of time and money. The money could be better spend on other caus. Do you agree or disagree?

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Space
exploration
 is a growing interest by scientists nowadays due to the expansion of knowledge on
space
 activity as well as key events happening in outer
space
. The most famous method of gaining funds for national
space
 companies is by the people's taxes,
however
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this
 may vary from country to country. There are some key benefits of investing
money
on
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space
exploration
.
Firstly
, dangerous natural disasters
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occurring
occuring
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occurring
at
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 some parts of the
world
 may be
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quicky
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 spotted from orbital satellites.
For example
- recently a Tornado near North America was spotted from the International
Space
 Station.
This
 way, plenty of
money
 wasted from the destruction of national monuments as well as personal property could be saved. Not only
money
 but
also
 human lives would
also
 be spared due to early spotting of
such
 natural disasters from
space
. Investing in
space
exploration
 could
also
finally
 be a vital factor for the growing population on planet Earth. It is an already known fact that the population of the
world
 is growing exponentially,
hence
, the groundbreaking discovery of another planet that could support life, or even a planet with resources that could be useful for mankind would be of massive help to the rapid increment of the total human count. Another advantage would be that
space
 travel would
also
 be a valid transportation system in the near future considering the fact that people are showing growing interest
over
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space
. As we are all aware,
money
 is the one thing that keeps the
world
 running. The
money
 collected from taxes could be used to feed people who suffer from
poverty
 or even help a country
that is
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suffering
sufferring
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suffering
 from
the
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 lack of basic necessities
such
 as food, water, clothes and electricity.
However
, I personally am convinced that regardless of whether the
money
 or
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at least
atleast
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at least
 a proportion of the
money
going
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 to charitable causes,
poverty
 would still exist in the
world
. There is a saying that even if the richest man in the
world
 donates all of his
money
 to
poverty affected
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 countries,
poverty
 still wouldn't end. In conclusion, since the advantages outweigh the
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disadvantages
disadcantages
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disadvantages
 of
space
exploration
, I think that governmental investment in
space
exploration
 is a positive initiative
to
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 the
world
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Space exploration
  • Technological advancement
  • International cooperation
  • Investment in science
  • Socioeconomic issues
  • Sustainable development
  • Resource allocation
  • Global collaboration
  • Humanitarian aid
  • Space debris
  • Fiscal responsibility
  • Interstellar
  • Celestial bodies
  • Spacefaring civilization
  • Earth-bound problems
  • Space race
  • Disparity
  • Innovation
  • Frontier of science
  • Long-term investment
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