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Nowadays, experience is more valued in the workplace than knowledge in many countries. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

#workplace #countries #outweigh
It is true that these days
the
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experience
 is the priority to get a well-paid job position, but at the same
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 we can not underestimate the importance of
knowledge
. At the outset, the workers need qualifications and
knowledge
 of
skills
such
 as literacy and numeracy, as well as
knowledge
 of modern technological systems. There is a number of professions where
knowledge
 plays
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 role.
For instance
, engineers, teachers, psychologists or doctors need both
experience
 and
knowledge
 to be successful in their careers. Obviously, while
certain
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type
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 of
knowledge
 can be enquired during work
experience
, it is essential to get a standard education beforehand, especially for
such
 serious professions as
medical
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worker
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 or
engineer
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.
On the other hand
, as
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 world is effectively controlled by machines and all vital and crucial data is being stored on digital resources, it gives great opportunities to people to develop their
skills
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 it. As we can see
knowledge
 plays a secondary role to
skills
 and
experience
.
In addition
, our modern world demands that companies and institutions have employees with very sophisticated
skills
 not just in technology but in dealing with modern systems and be flexible to changes, as we are living
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 era of
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very fast-moving technological progress. As a consequence, frequently workers’ technological expertise often takes precedence over their basic education. What’s more, companies and organizations can not flourish without hiring workers with
necessary
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experience
. In conclusion, despite
knowledge
 still being very important in modern workplaces, it is clear that the advantages of a greater emphasis on job
experience
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 any disadvantages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • valued
  • workplace
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • experience
  • knowledge
  • mentor
  • colleagues
  • innovation
  • stagnation
  • traditional methods
  • recent graduates
  • theoretical knowledge
  • diversity
  • viewpoints
  • proven ability
  • stability
  • industries
  • technology
  • adaptation
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