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Towns and cities are attractive places. Some people suggest that the government should spend money putting in more works of art like paintings and statues to make them better to live in. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Countries have started funding development processes for certain regions of their countries and the general public seems to show more interest
towards
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 the
area
 they live in. There are both pros and cons to
this
 effect and some of them are discussed below. The investment of money
on
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city
 development schemes seems to motivate the people living in that particular region.
For instance
, the people living in Colombo before the industrial advancements have proven to have had a reduced urge to walk around the
city
 as opposed to the current residents who live there.
In addition
, the introduction of more buildings
such
 as malls, restaurants as well as public attractions like parks increases the unit land value in the
area
.
This
 is beneficial to the government thereby increasing the value of the
country
 itself.
Moreover
, attractive cities tend to gain more of the tourist's attention in comparison to under-developed cities.
This
 rapidly boosts a
country
's tourism levels while bringing
in
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monetary value to the
country
in addition
. The
disadvantages
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 of spending money on advancing
city
 areas
is
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 that the
area
 would get
more
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busier than usual.
This
 may affect the resident's way of life and even cause them to move to another
city
. The pollution levels would
also
 increase as more energy would be used to construct as well as maintain the
area
. It is a known fact that many major cities around the world are becoming more and more developed by the day.
Hence
 for the lifestyle of the people to improve in the
country
, I believe that governments have to fund the advancements of popular areas within the
country
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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