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The road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

#road #access #city
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xity
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city
 hospital are changed during the three years. Over the period, the city hospital
accesses
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 saw remarkable developments. The municipality decided to make
an
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easy access to the hospital for all
patient
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 by relocating the public transportation closer to it. The city hospital was located to the north of
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 which was
surounde
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surrounded
 by a ring road that still exists after 3 years in 2010. Another significant
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 is about the Bus station's location
that
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was moved to the west side of
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Hospital Rd plus it was expanded as well.
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 a roundabout was built in place of
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 stop. In terms of parking
spaces
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 the staff and public
one
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 were divided completely to make rooms for
public
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.
For
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controling
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controlling
 the
cars
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 flow around the hospital two new
roundabout
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 were constructed
in
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 the north and south of
the
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Hospital Rd.
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