Some people say that teenagers should work part-time and earn money. This way they will learn basic lessons about work and become more disciplined. Others argue that teenagers shouldn't sacrifice their rest and after-school activities to work. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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free time. They believe that kids and teenagers should use their after-school time to play, learn and have fun and each activity that causes to make money from them

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is a kind of child abuse.

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thinking, we should respect our

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adolescence and remember that these ages are

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of their life to learn, grow and be happy and free.

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their freedom and happiness; No need to encourage them to work.

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