Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

Some

individuals

are of the opinion that, the right

way

of connecting

people

of different

origin

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and

ages

is through songs. I agree with them but I still think there are other ways through which these

people

can be united other than

music

.

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essay will argue why

music

is not the only good

way

of uniting

people

of different

ages

and

origin

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. The reason why some

people

think that song is a good

way

through which

individuals

of different origin and of different

ages

come together might be because

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every ceremony in a community, there is always an element of

music

where

people

of different

ages

comes to dance away their sorrows and bond better.

Furthermore

,

music

gives motivation to

people

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instance, soldiers of every tribe

has

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their chants which they sing while going

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war, and

this

motivates them and gives them

spirit

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the spirit

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of oneness to stick to each other

therefore

uniting them.

Lastly

, a singer from another tribe can be called to sing a song elsewhere even where

people

don't understand his language but with his song,

people

will love and understand him thereby creating a bond with him and his

people

. Meanwhile, there are other means of connecting

individuals

of different

ages

and ethnicity.

This

can be through plays and

people

engaged in plays are too many and they are of different

ages

. These plays

tells

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stories of

people

's different cultures and backgrounds making the audience aware of these other tribes thereby creating the spirit of oneness. The

second

way

is through Schools. Different

people

of different backgrounds come together in a school to learn

therefore

enabling them

mix

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together and learn from each other.

This

can lead to unity amongst the different tribes.

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the

church

is another

way

of uniting the public.

People

of different backgrounds attend

church

services and programs most of them hold important positions in

church

and with the teachings in

church

about oneness, they get to grow in love with one another and be comfortable with other

people

thereby uniting them. In conclusion, while some see

music

as a good

way

of uniting

individuals

of different

ages

and ethnicity, there are other ways like through plays, schools and

church

by which

people

are united and I agree with them.