You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You want to join a new gym in your neighbourhood. Write a letter to the gym manager. In your letter ask what types of membership are available, and what the prices are ask what activities are available ask what the joining procedure is You should write at least 150 words

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am overjoyed to hear that you have opened a new

gym

on the Hayfields estate. As a resident of the area, it's a long overdue blessing! As you can probably tell, I'm interested in joining and have some

question

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I'd like to ask about it. I'm living on Grove Road at the moment, which is ideal for access to the

gym

, with both my husband and my

ten year old

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ten-year-old

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boy. We would all be interested in becoming members of your

gym

and would like to know what types of membership you could offer us as a family. My husband would like to take part in

weights-training

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weights training

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if possible,

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whereas

wheareas

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whereas

I would be interested in aerobics and my son would like to take part in 5 aside football games. Would these activities be possible? How much would it all cost together?

Finally

, we'd like to know what we need to do in order to sign up as members. What do we need to bring with us to the

gym

? Will a photo be necessary? We look forward to hearing from you, Yours faithfully, Masha

Dimitroeva

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Dimitrova

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

190 words

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