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Some believe that nuclear weapons benefit the world at large. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some are of the view that the existence of atomic bombs could profit the
world
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 in many ways. I strongly disagree, with
this
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 since the mere presence of
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 weapons could bring a catastrophic end to the
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 as we know in seconds. Arsenal of nuclear weapons means the probability of igniting a nuclear war will be imminent.
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 with, at present only a handful of nations have the capability to build
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 weapons, and even as we speak these superior powers are being used to suppress developing
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 to bow to the agendas of these
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.
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, the
world
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 has been divided into playgrounds of agendas that can start
World
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 War 3 in the near future.
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 when
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 war begins the impact on mankind will be devastating.
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, thermal shockwaves which erupt from detonating a bomb will vaporize cities and
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 to ashes in seconds leaving no living organism alive.
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, nuclear radiation will impact all living things resulting in a suffocating death in months.
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, with the less breathable air and drinkable water on the planet life as we see will go
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 a standstill which will result in the annihilation of humans. In conclusion, Atomic bombs even though some
countries
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 perceive them as beneficial to the
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, I strongly believe that
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 will create an unbalanced chain of power between developed and developing
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 which will only bring detrimental effects to the
world
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.
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