"Prevention is better than cure" Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventive measure. To what extent do you agree.

Ms
Rory Collins Community
Diabetes
Nurse Community Centre 526 Sanditon City Sanditon 8 January 2022 RE:
Ms
Divina
Hillsong
, 55 years old Dear
Ms
Collins, I am writing to refer
Ms
Divina
Hillsong
, who has uncontrolled
diabetes
type 2. She requires health teaching and ongoing care.
Ms
Hillsong
has had
diabetes
since 2011
and
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for which she was advised to revise her dietary lifestyle, reduce her weight and
increased
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her exercise
respectively
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. After 2 years, she still refused a dietician consultation
as a result
of her cascade of symptoms of untreated
diabetes
such
as progression of her vision impairment and increase in weight. She commenced Glicazide 80mg twice a day. In September 2011,
Ms
Hillsong
has
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Biliary Colic and underwent a Laparoscopic Cholecystectomy.
In addition
, her waterproof dressing on the operation is scheduled to be removed today. She was on analgesics for her post-operative pain. Currently, she can manage to walk short distances and has better glycemic control,
although
, she still has difficulties in checking her blood glucose. Significantly, she agrees to a Dietician referral. It would be beneficial if you could give information to her in terms of self-testing with voice-activated monitoring of glucose. Please stress the importance of glycemic control.
Further
, I would be grateful if you could encourage her to comply with the dietician's advice and her personal weight regimen. If you have any questions, do not hesitate to contact me. Yours sincerely, Nurse Surgical Ward Community Hospital
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • preventive measures
  • incidence of diseases
  • quality of life
  • complications and suffering
  • cost-effective
  • ongoing expenses
  • public health education
  • awareness campaigns
  • government policies
  • vaccinations
  • screenings
  • healthy lifestyle promotion
  • healthcare costs
  • long term benefits
  • disease prevention
  • healthcare funding
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