"There are varying opinions regarding the enjoyment movies bring when viewed in different modes. Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets and there is no need to go to the cinema."
It is a commonly held belief that people should watch films in a
cinema
because of get extremely
pleasureChange the word
extreme
,
Remove the comma
apply
while
considering technology period, other ones claim we have to track movies on phone on other smart equipments
. I lean a little beat toward the second view, Change the wording
equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
although
these both have special features.
One obvious upside to observe
the film in a movie house is high quality. Wrong verb form
observing
While
watching HD film in
Change preposition
on
the
wider screen and Correct article usage
a
besides
in the comfortable armchairs, Change preposition
apply
eye-catching
Correct word choice
and eye-catching
cinema
hall, the person who watches movie
gets great pleasure. A second possible advantage is Correct article usage
the movie
this
place embraces much more convenience and elegant space. In view of the fact that, in this
case
we can spend our leisure time efficiently doing both observing film and being Add a comma
case,
together with
friends.
As regards the benefit of watching movies on the
phone, tablet or another innovative Correct article usage
a
facilities
is to save Fix the agreement mistake
facility
your
money Correct pronoun usage
apply
while
without going to the Correct word choice
apply
cinema
. Even if some applications such
as Netflix, Disney
are Correct word choice
and Disney
utilizing
to track the drama, it will Wrong verb form
utilised
yet
save the bulk of your money. Rephrase
apply
Furthermore
, using technology equipments
to observe films Change the wording
equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
are
capable Correct subject-verb agreement
is
to protect
waste of time. Change preposition
of protecting
Because we
can watch it between two activities as follows Correct word choice
We
waiting
something else like a bus, taxi or Add the preposition
waiting for
while
going to work.
To conclude
, both side
have Change to a plural noun
sides
a
special benefits. Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
Consider
these all, despite watching the drama on Wrong verb form
Considering
phone
Correct article usage
the phone
has
more advantages as Wrong verb form
having
save
some valuable things like time or money, Wrong verb form
saving
cinema
embraces huge enjoyment and have
fun for people.Unnecessary verb
apply
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