Some People Believe that it is the responsibility ifindividual to take care of their own health and diet. Others however believethat government should make sure that their citizen have a healthy diet. Discuss both view and give your opinion

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People’s opinion differs as to whether authority
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is responsible
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is responsible
for people’s balanced
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or
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own
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health and
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health and
meal. I agree with
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viewpoint. Those who argue that government need to ensure that
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people have
a healthy
food
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have their reason. That regulatory authority needs to
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make regulation
make regulations
regarding
food
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because adulteration in
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food
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is
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increasing day
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will give
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to various
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of
health
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on
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. To overcome
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issue authority needs to make
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new law with strict
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punishment for
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some think that to maintain public
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wellness is
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the moral duty of the government and
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a Healthy
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diet
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is necessary for everyone's wellness.
hence
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its
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the government
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government
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responsibility to provide a healthy
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.
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, I sided with those who feel that its
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individual duty
individuality
to maintain their own
health
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and
diet
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because its one’s personal choice
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what they
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what they
want to eat.
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can take
its
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own decision
whether
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about whether
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he
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they
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want
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to eat
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healthy or
healthy
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healthy or
unhealthy stuff.
Selection
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The selection
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of
food
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is the basic right of each human on earth.So if they want to have unhealthy
food
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no one can help
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to be fit
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and healthy
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andhealthy
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and healthy
person.
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,
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individual eating deep fried
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daily
then
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government can't
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the governmentcan’t
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help him to be healthy as it contains lots of unhealthy fats. In conclusion, while there are reasons to believe that
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government needs
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to take care of their people’s
health
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and
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, my own view is that
everyoneneeds
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everyone needs
to take care of his own
diet
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and
health
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because its
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right of
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individual to
individual
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individualto
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individual to
eat
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food
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the food
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of his choice.
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