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Some People Believe that it is the responsibility ifindividual to take care of their own health and diet. Others however believethat government should make sure that their citizen have a healthy diet. Discuss both view and give your opinion

#people #responsibility #care #health #diet #believethat #government #citizen
People’s opinion differs as to whether authority
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is responsible
isresponsible
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is responsible
 for people’s balanced
meal
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 or
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need
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 to take care
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of his
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his
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their
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 own
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health and
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health and
 meal. I agree with
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 viewpoint. Those who argue that government need to ensure that
people’shave
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people have
 a healthy
food
 have their reason. That regulatory authority needs to
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make regulation
make regulations
 regarding
food
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 because adulteration in
food
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 is
increasingday
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increasing day
 by day and
this
 will give
rises
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 to various
type
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 of
health
issue
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issues
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 on
largescale
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large scale
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. To overcome
this
 issue authority needs to make
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new law with strict
punishmentfor
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punishment for
 the one who defaults. Apart from
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 some think that to maintain public
wellnessis
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wellness is
wellness
 the moral duty of the government and
Healthy
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a Healthy
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diet
 is necessary for everyone's wellness.
hence
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the government
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government
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government's
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 responsibility to provide a healthy
diet
.
However
, I sided with those who feel that its
individualduty
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individual duty
individuality
 to maintain their own
health
 and
diet
 because its one’s personal choice
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what they
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what they
 want to eat.
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Individual
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An individual
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 can take
its
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their
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 own decision
whether
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about whether
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he
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they
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want
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 to eat
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healthy or
healthy
healthyor
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healthy or
 unhealthy stuff.
Selection
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The selection
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 of
food
 is the basic right of each human on earth.So if they want to have unhealthy
food
 no one can help
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 to be fit
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and healthy
healthy
andhealthy
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and healthy
 person.
For example
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 individual eating deep fried
food
 daily
then
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government can't
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 help him to be healthy as it contains lots of unhealthy fats. In conclusion, while there are reasons to believe that
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government needs
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the governmentneeds
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 to take care of their people’s
health
 and
diet
, my own view is that
everyoneneeds
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everyone needs
 to take care of his own
diet
 and
health
 because its
basic
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 right of
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individual to
individual
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an individualto
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individualto
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individual to
eat
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food
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the food
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 of his choice.
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