In some areas of the US, a curfew is imposed in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. what is your opinion about this?
The curfew is inflicted in specific areas of the US and
teenagers
are obligated to stay in
Correct your spelling
indoor
door
at night unless they are gone along by an adult. Add an article
the door
However
, their freedom is limited but they could be safe instead
. Therefore
, in my opinion
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,opinion
this
could be useful in unsafe areas to make parents
confident their children be secured
.
In spite of development in some countries Replace the word
secure
such
as the US, the security of children is one of the crucial issues yet what is mentioned by plenty of politicians. Additionally
, it is alleged that is
completely personal and parents
are managed to control them in their own way. Whereas, keeping teenagers
indoors is considered by pupils. For instance
, in quiet states such
as Seattle, the criminal threshold is utterly higher than others
. Change preposition
in others
Furthermore
, it could well help parents
to be sure their youths are safe.
On the other hand
, teenagers
are supposed to behave less aggressive when they are with an adult and they would be under control. In addition
, this
could well Add a missing verb
be the
the
fruitful way to keep Correct article usage
a
high risk
children. Add a hyphen
high-risk
For example
, in areas which
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where
in
criminal Change preposition
apply
behaviors
among Change the spelling
behaviours
of
youth are numerously higher than Change preposition
apply
others
, Change preposition
in others
this
approach would be effective.
To sum up, I absolutely reckon this
way is not the best one which would be exist
, but it is a good deed what Change the verb form
exist
parents
are convinced their teenagers
be safe in the hazard area. However
, governments must make attempt to change this
situation even their
freedom would be not limited. Correct word choice
if their
I
point Correct your spelling
In
of
fact, freedom should be Change preposition
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