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in their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this?Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

#businesses #emphasise #products #development
Nowadays businesses use their advertising to emphasise the
products
 they launch and to communicate to the
customer
 it has new
features
. Even to some extent that even by using the word "New' they give a fresh sense to
customers
 to buy the
product
 they have been using for a period of time. For that, advertising includes innovative ideas which
fascinates
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fascinate
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 the
customer
 to continue to buy the
product
 they have been using or to purchase it as a new
customer
. When a
customer
 visits Supermarkets, There are salespeople visiting them with daily discounts and promotions while insisting on the new
features
 of their
product
 while comparing the other brands of the same good and emphasising the extra
features
 included in the new
product
. Free trials and
buy
Wrong verb form
buying
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 one
product
 and
get
Wrong verb form
getting
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 the new
product
 as an attachment to that
product
 is
also
 very famous in advertising
products
.
Customers
 nowadays are
also
 very demanding and seek new changes and benefits from
products
 over a period of time. With the evolving technology and access to more information
customers
 have the access to check whether
products
 really contain all these new
features
 advertised by the companies and even some have taken actions against where it had failed to comply with what it delivers in advertising.
However
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 it's evident that
customers
 are impacted by the advertising feature and it is considered a positive development for both
customers
 and service providers as it's vital that the world keeps growing for betterment amidst all the things happening around it.It is a positive development that
customers
also
 experience new
features
 on a new platform and
also
the
Correct article usage
apply
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marketers should be vigilant
on
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about
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 what they promise to
customers
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emphasise
  • advertising
  • products
  • innovation
  • competitive strategy
  • consumer dissatisfaction
  • value
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