Some people believe that a country will benefit greatly by a high percentage of young people going to universities. Others argue that it only leads to a higher unemployment rate. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion.

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young people who are going to study
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university.
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view
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views
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of
this
argument before my opinion
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, in conclusion,
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conclusion was reached. In
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a temporary
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society, some individuals believe that a country will
have
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apply
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much benefit
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many benefits
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by
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from
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the high number of
the
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apply
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young people who are going to study
in
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at
show examples
the
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apply
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university.
This
essay will discuss both
view
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views
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of
this
argument before my opinion
Add the comma(s)
, in conclusion,
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in
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apply
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conclusion was reached.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • innovation
  • economic growth
  • competitive edge
  • underemployment
  • oversaturation
  • mismatch
  • skills
  • critical thinking
  • civic engagement
  • personal development
  • societal well-being
  • significant
  • student debt
  • financial implications
  • deter
  • vocational training
  • continuous learning
  • workforce
  • adaptable
  • relevant skills
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