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In the future, self-driving cars will replace human drivers. Is this a positive or negative development?

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Science and technology are growing at an exponential level ,
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, we are able to believe all things that once seems to be impossible are now possible, even self-driving a car is one of them. Without any ,doubt self-driving machines will replace human drivers in the coming future and it has a lot of pros with few cons. Humans begins are an intelligent species on planet earth, but we people make
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many errors knowingly or unknowingly because we get bored doing repetitive tasks on daily bases. Driving is one of them ,we need to travel from point A to point B but we tend to make accidents .To avoid
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 of scenarios a self-driving automobile can help us. They are not that creative like us but they are good at repetitive tasks, accuracy, precision and especially following rules. So due to
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, we can avoid more number accidents which are very good for our mankind as we lose
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thousands of lives in accidents . The self-driving
cars
 will take a few jobs, especially human drivers but they will give us
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 in return , we need specific experts who could help to analyse weak points or missing points of the self-driving Vehicles. Due to
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self-driving
cars
, we could create
a much different and unique job opportunities
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 which could help us focus on different problems rather than learning how to drive. Surprisingly few people assume that self-driving
cars
 could create a portion of issues which create bigger troubles than our previous generations and which could lead to the end of our human civilizations. But I strongly believe that self-driving
cars
 are not made to destroy mankind but could help us to make sure that our loved ones travel and return home safely.
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