Many people try to achieve success through their career or education. What can success mean to different people? What is your view of success?

Many
people
work hard to have a successful life.
However
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the meaning of
success
is not a clear one and it can be different things to different
people
.
This
essay will consider
success
about
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the workplace, family, and
finally
personal achievements. For many
people
,
success
is related
with
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their career. For some
people
,
this
is measured in
the
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how high their salary is; if they earn more than someone else they will be more successful.
However
, others do not have
this
view and say that if you are working in a job that you do not enjoy
then
you cannot be
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successful, regardless of your income.
Instead
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you need to consider job satisfaction and what you achieve in the job.
For example
, teachers who have helped many
people
achieve their goals or other workers who have successfully finished a project or other
target
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that they have. Another important part of
success
maybe
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the family. Raising up and providing for a family is an important part of life for many
people
. In
this
case
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success
can be measured in how satisfied
are
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your family with close bonds between family members being more important than money. A final aspect is
personal
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achievement. We all have goals and dreams which we would like to be achieved. These dreams are very diverse and vary from person to person.
For example
, some
people
may wish to travel the world and others compete in a marathon, or write a book. By achieving these things we are accomplishing targets and would be feeling very successful. In conclusion,
people
may see
success
in their professional personal. I would argue that
success
is individual for everybody but that for me, it is a mix of all of the different things described above.
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  • fulfillment
  • personal goals
  • happiness
  • career milestones
  • professional development
  • financial independence
  • security
  • philanthropy
  • contribution
  • personal development
  • recognition
  • work-life balance
  • self-improvement
  • well-being
  • subjective
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