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Write a letter to a friend. In your letter Tell your friend about the job and what sort of work it involves Say why you think the job would be suitable for hime Explain how to apply for the job

Dear Matt, I am writing
this
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 letter to apprise you about a job vacancy for an
onsite
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on-site
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 support consultant for the Strata management software
which
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, which
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 I heard from one of my friends in an international company located in Bristol. The company is headquartered in Australia, and they have a branch here in Hayes Road, Bristol. They are looking for two years of experienced professionals with technical knowledge to support one of their prominent clients on their premises. When I
know
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 about
this
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 position, I was suddenly reminded
about
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of
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you
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what you
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 talked to me
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last
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about last
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 week and that you are looking for a career change. I believe
this
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 will be a suitable job based on your experience and skills.
Also
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, you
can
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will be
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 able to draw a better salary than
currently
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you currently
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has
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have
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.
Moreover
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, you can visit Australia once in a
while
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 as part of your work
which
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, which
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 is one of your favourite places. You can see the job post in their LinkedIn profile, where you can go through it for a better understanding and submit your resume with all the necessary details. I hope
this
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 information will be a great help
for
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to
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 you at
this
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 point in time. Let me know if you need any other details that I can get from my friend. Wishing you all the best. Kind Regards, Maria

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grammar
Fix small grammar mistakes and use simple words. For example, 'two years of experience' and 'you can able to' should be 'two years of experience' and 'you can'.
tone
Make the tone friendlier for a letter to a friend by using more simple and warm words.
structure
Put one idea in one short paragraph. Start a new paragraph for a new idea.
content
Keep the flow clear: say what the job is, why it fits, and how to apply in that order.
content
The letter has a clear goal: share job info with a friend.
clarity
It tells where to find the job post (LinkedIn).
tone
Closing lines are kind and warm.
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