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Some educationalists argue that non-exam, arts-based subjects, such as music, drama, art and craft, should be compulsory in the secondary-school curriculum. They believe that activities such as these can improve overall academic performance. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The picture witnessed dramatic changes in the
village
 of Eyemouth from 1995 to the present. Overall, the noticeable transformation in
this
 renovation was that the farmland was cleared and replaced with a golf court, the main road,
however
, remained without any change over the period shown.
Moreover
, the forest park was
also
 cleared in the east of the
village
. In detail, as was mentioned above, the trees of the forest park were cut down to make way for the tennis court, and the houses on the west-north of the map were expanded. a car park district was constructed to the east-south of the
village
next
 to the hotel, while the building of the hotel and cafe remained. The shop area situated below the houses block was converted into restaurants, and the fish market in the west-south of the
village
 above the sea was demolished and replaced with a residential district which involves several apartments. In the south, the fishing port was removed through the sea and nothing was replaced
instead
.
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