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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the sahara dessert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

#tourists #places #conditions #sahara #dessert #antarctic #visit
Nowadays travellers like to explore
a
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different
kinds
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 of areas
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for example
 Sahara desert or the antarctic, where
situation
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the situation
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 is much
dangerous
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. In
this
, essay we will discuss
advantages
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the advantages
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 and disadvantages
for
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 those who prefer to go
such
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 places.
First
, if we talk about advantages,
people
 tour different
countries
 or
citiess
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cities
 which is a new experience.
This
 experience makes them
visit
 more places
such
 as
Sahara
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the Sahara
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 desert or the antarctic. The beauty of other
countries
 and the kindness of
people
 attract
tourist
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tourists
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 to
visit
 these areas. Due to
journey
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the journey
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 of travelling
aboard
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abroad
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 their experience and way of thinking change other
people
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people's
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 behaviour.
people
 get to know other persons cultures and traditions because of going to other places.
Secondly
, if we look disadvantages of going
such
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 kinds of
countries
, we get to know that many
countries
 are going to do a difficult
situation
 for
tourist
 to
visit
 their place. They make strict rules and laws for visitors. They make
the
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 worse
situation
 for
people
 because many
countries
 are not happy with
tourist
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tourists
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. they don't want let them to
visit
 their own country.That human beings are
such
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rude. they always change the rules and regulations for the
people
 who like to come to their areas. In conclusion, There are advantages and
also
 disadvantages for
tourist
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tourists
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. we should always know both sides of the point of view. Some
countries
 welcome their
tourist
 and few
countries
 make a bad
situation
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the situation
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 for visitors so we should always look
first
 at which place and
people
 are best for visitors.
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