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In some cultures children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are advantages and disadvanages of giving children this message?

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 are employed in full-time work. 52% of alumni got full-time work,
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% employed a part-time job.
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 yet. 13%
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 get postgraduation study. After 5 years’ work
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 not bad salaries. 80% of freelance consultants and people from
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 sector earn 75.000-100.000
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 start-ups and
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 private companies. 10% of entrepreneurs receive a salary of 25.000-49.500
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