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It is the use of the public transport in one country , by age group and living location in 2016 that the line grap

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It is the use of the public transport in one country , by
age
group
 and living location in 2016 that the line graph illustrate. Overall , in large city
locals
 the peak of
age
group
percentages
 was in the
group
 that aged between 31 and 45 , while other
locals
 the most dramatic percentage was in the
group
 that aged between 16 and 30 . In the large city
locals
 the most dramatic difference in the
percentages
 of
age
group
 who used public
transportation
 is the : the
group
 who aged 31-45 they had the highest percentage which is 65 % approximately ,
in contrast
 , the 61-75 aged
group
 had the lowest percentage in using public
transportation
 which is 10 %.
On the other hand
, for other
locals
 , the
percentages
 didn’t have much of different between the
age
 groups in using public
transportation
 they all had a small
percentages
 comparing to the large city local
percentages
. The only two
percentages
 that are worthy to be highlighted is the 16-30 and the 76+ aged groups who used public
transportation
 the most and least: 25% and 7% approximately and respectfully .
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