In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space avaliable for building is in the countryside and not build new homes there. what is your opinion about this?

There are many countries where there is required to rebuild
houses
but the only reason is capacity in that particular area. We will discuss
about
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this
matter and
i
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will
also
share my side in
this
essay.
First
, we will see that in every new
places
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there
is
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some new homes required. which we have to
constract
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construct
contract
them because
people
comes
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from different
areas
and going to live
in
particular
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area . population increase and more
houses
needed. so is that case persons required some shelters or
houses
where they can stay easily.
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, more shelter is required when in a larger city
people
comes from different area for the purpose of jobs and they want to set
parmenant
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permanent
in that city.
Secondly
, In
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over crowded
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overcrowded
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cities there is no space available except
rural
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areas
.
people
avoided
to live
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countryside
areas
because there
is
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no basic facilities
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available
avaliable
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available
for example
hospital, schools, colleges, banks etc.
people
prefer to settle in the middle of
country
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. In conclusion, we discuss soo many things in
this
essay.
people
wants
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to live in new
houses
but they don't want to live
rural
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in rural
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areas
because of overpopulation. In my point of
view
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people
poeple
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people
adjust
in
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some
reasons
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because in all cases
people
don't get all
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facilities
facilites
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facilities
that they want.
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