In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space avaliable for building is in the countryside and not build new homes there. what is your opinion about this?
There are many countries where there is required to rebuild
houses
but the only reason is capacity in that particular area. We will discuss about
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a particular
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where they can stay easily. For example
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in that city.
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overcrowded
rural
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in rural
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available
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available
for example
hospital, schools, colleges, banks etc. people
prefer to settle in the middle of country
.
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houses
but they don't want to live rural
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
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- moreover
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- however
- although
- even though
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