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Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In the present age, there has been sparked much debate about
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' teaching systems and whether there should be gender-mixed learning institutions or separated. I assume that mixed
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 provide more usefulness. In
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 essay, I will discuss both views and give my opinion. The primary factor we need to take into consideration is that females and males that attend
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 receive more access to diversity.
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, kids learn to be not discriminating and have a better ability to social bonding. The
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 benefit is that mixed
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 prevent sexism.
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, women these days face discrimination in their work or
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school
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 which includes both
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 and girls teaches them to be respectful and prepares for the real world by making them work and do projects together.
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, some others may claim that educating
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 and girls separately should be a necessity.
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, people tend to think that it reduces sexual tension which enhances better working and learning quality by eliminating distractions.
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, separate gender
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 provide the possibility to choose objects children want to learn. It is because girls have more interests that are in common and
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 helps the
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 concentrate on some subjects than others more. Having considered both views, I think that females and males should be educated in mixed
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 which empowers a better understanding of
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real
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 world, promotes social bonding, and decreases discrimination.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • co-education
  • gender segregation
  • peer pressure
  • academic performance
  • gender stereotypes
  • discrimination
  • social skills
  • teamwork
  • collaboration
  • diversity
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