Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own. Discuss these both views and give your own opinion.
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argued
that parents should stimulate their offspring in order to participate in team Wrong verb form
argue
activities
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while
others say that it is crucial for Linking Words
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activities
is much better.
On the one hand,It is believed that when Use synonyms
children
occupy themselves on their own,they learn how they can learn how to overcome difficulties themselves because they do not depend on others and do everything without anyone's support Use synonyms
therefore
they will become stronger compared to their peers.Linking Words
Furthermore
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children
who play sports like judo,tennis and so on are more likely to be successful in their real life because these kinds of sports are individual and they require not only physical but Use synonyms
also
mental power.One explanation for Linking Words
this
,many famous athletes have strong characters like Federer and Nadal.Linking Words
Hence
,it is important to encourage Linking Words
children
to do anything alone.
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On the other hand
,I believe group actions are much more beneficial for Linking Words
children
.Use synonyms
Firstly
,when they take part in a group at their school it will help them to learn how they can work with others at an early age.Linking Words
Moreover
,they will have a chance to boost their interaction skills.Linking Words
In other words
,they will be extraverted by making communication with a lot of individuals.To justify my opinion,in my country,some parents have an inclination to take their Linking Words
children
to a conversation club to improve their speaking skills.Use synonyms
Secondly
,participating in sports teams like football,volleyball and basketball will be beneficial to build up their determination because they will compete with both their team members and rivals in order to expel them which is why it will shape their personality significantly.
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To conclude
,from some people's point of Linking Words
view
parents should trigger their Add a comma
view,
children
to do Use synonyms
activities
on their own.I believe they should join in organised team Use synonyms
activities
.Use synonyms
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