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It is the job of governments and companies to deal with the huge environmental problems which we face. Individuals on their own can do little or nothing. What is your opinion about this statement?

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 to deal with the larger environmental problems which everyone faces. In my opinion, without the help of normal ,
people
 only governments and companies can not deal with these issues.
To begin
 with, every person is responsible to make a better world.
In other words
, lawmakers make rules and big companies only give some funds to support their nation but
this
 does not enough till every single individual did not know their duty to save the
environment
 and make it healthy
earth
 so only some groups of
people
 cannot do anything.
For example
, 'world
environment
 day' celebrate releasing
people
 that they are part of it and if they are not doing
this
then
 it is hard to save the world and how it harmful is.
Hence
, responsible populations make their motherland better.
Secondly
, making save the
earth
 for their own
next
 generation. To explain it, if
people
 are aware
then
 they can save a lot of things for their kids to make their life better, the problem we face they do not face is the only the best gift we give our own children.
For instance
, there are many clubs, and camps, which help to make a better
environment
 and grow trees and air pollution-free nature.
Thus
, the
earth
 become better to better nowadays since
people
 are aware. On the opposite side, if government and companies do not make rules and give funds
then
 it seems impossible to make clear natural
earth
 so we can not deny their jobs as well.
However
 'WHO' is
also
 a group of different countries making meetings to develop a better era.
As a result
, all the sport form different types of
people
 and groups as parts of a healthy
environment
. In conclusion, individuals play the most important role to clear and healthy nature as well the awareness to not harm the area but government and large industries give Money to sport their nation.
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