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Not enough students around the world choose to study science subjects at university. What are the reasons for this? What impact does this issue have on society?

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Technology is rapidly changing the lives of people around the world, creating a high demand for
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graduates
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 with a background in
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.
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, the number of students studying relevant subjects is well below the required level.
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 problem seems to be caused by outdated preconceptions, which determine young people’s choices today. One of those preconceptions is that certain subjects are better suited for men. Examples of these include mathematics, computer
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,
technologies
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 and other fields of knowledge, which are totally dominated by males. In recent decades,
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noticeable progress has been achieved by many countries in acknowledging that men and women are equally capable in
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. Despite
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 big step towards equality, female employees may still feel unwelcome or, in some instances, face evident discrimination in
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 work environments.
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, many women with a natural inclination to
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 settle on studying humanities or social
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 at
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, depriving society of their main talent. Another reason for the lack of
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 students spreads even wider. In the past, scientists were paid significantly less than professionals in
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prestigious areas,
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 as business and law.
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, ambitious young people tended to choose highly paid occupations, disregarding their aptitude for
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. Things have changed; today jobs in
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 are among those with the highest remuneration, but
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 trend is yet to be reflected in the
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 application numbers.
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, in the UK, over half of all international students still choose to study for a degree in business.
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, economies around the world are affected by an oversupply of social
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graduates
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 and a deficit of
graduates
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 with technical skills. Not surprisingly, complaints of fresh
graduates
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 who cannot find a job are frequent.
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, it seems some young people still perceive studying
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 as a route towards a mediocre income from a job where most of one’s colleagues are men.
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, too many opt for a degree in social sciences, creating an imbalanced society where highly-educated
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graduates
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 struggle to find a skilled job.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

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A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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