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Some people think that a person improves their intellectual skills more when doing group activities. To what extent do you agree?

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Intellectual skills highly rely on different tasks.
While
 some people believe that it can be improved in
group
activities
,
however
, I partially agree with it.
This
 is a debatable and controversial essay. I have given my justification below. Is
this
 really true that
group
activities
 change human intellectual skills?
To begin
 with, it boosts teamwork, spirit and focus. It
also
 assists an individual to be more confident and extroverted.
In addition
, communication skills
also
 increase by doing
such
 tasks. Because of competition with their peers during a joint event, it supports an individual to be more smart, dynamic and responsible.
For instance
, children
while
 putting in
group
 exercises learn the stuff faster
and
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so the
group
activities
 have been given more weightage in the school curriculum.
Moreover
, many parents plan to involve their children in Toastmasters or other public events.
On the other hand
, sometimes
group
 jobs make the public more anxious and stressed. They assume that if we
failed
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 in the tasks during discussion, other participants will laugh at them and
such
 thoughts make them nervous.
Although
 many
population
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 feel that there are more benefits than drawbacks to
group
 work, their internal fear makes them more vulnerable. As per research conducted by a few universities in the world, more than 50% of people are not interested in any teamwork. In fact,
this
 has been
subsequently
 accepted by many nations.
To conclude
, it is evident from the above summary that,
group
activities
 are definitely helpful to some extent,
Nevertheless
,
it
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they
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also
creates
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create
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 concern for some people with which I somehow
agreed
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.
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Ensure that all parts of the essay directly relate to the task prompt and fully address the topic. Provide a more balanced argument by exploring both sides of the argument in greater depth.
coherence and cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present, but they could be strengthened. Work on creating a clear and cohesive introduction that introduces the topic and the writer's stance. Additionally, ensure the conclusion effectively summarizes the main points and restates the writer's position.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • intellectual skills
  • group activities
  • collaborative learning
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving
  • communication
  • interpersonal skills
  • diverse perspectives
  • creativity
  • individual study
  • personal reflection
  • autonomy
  • learning styles
  • approaches
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