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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

#people #community #service #part #school #programmes
It is argued that volunteering in social
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 obliged to the youngsters of our generation as it is
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 extra curriculum activity without any
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 leading to social welfare .
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 with the statement that non-profit organisational service must be a part of high school programmes . Apart from
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education , in school students must be taught
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social
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 to be done without receiving any income or profit from the activity they are performing .
However
 , pupils get to learn some moral values and the value of money while undergoing
such
activities
 .
For example
 , soft skills , communicating politely with others , teaching moral values to unskilled people , enhancing their skills in whichever field they belong
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, etc . These
activities
 lead to enhance the thinking of the
volunteerers
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volunteers
 and make them more productive and efficient in their work . In some universities , it is seen that what you have down outside the classroom in your real life apart from the homework and lectures you had completed . Extra curriculum
activities
 are required in an individual to have
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vast thinking
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 his and others life so that he/she could play a vital role in someone's life . What you have done outside the classroom is often the thing that differentiates you from everyone else and gets you that coveted spot. In conclusion , teenagers must take part in
such
 social
activities
 as part of their schooling as it makes them learn more and more with a lot of experience at
such
 a young age .
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