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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #community #service #part #school
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It is true that many high schools make
students
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get a chance
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unpaid
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service
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 it is argued that it is not much more
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 wasting their
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, it is my
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belief
 that unpaid
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service
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 should be a required part of high school. On the one hand,
students
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 are only considered by their results.
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, some parents have thought that all the
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activities
 except studying is
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meaningless thing. Actually, in my experience, our
community
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service
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time
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 was discontinued because of parents' protests.
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 they called and yelled at school, the reason is only that it is too wasteful for our kids preparing for the university entrance examination.
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,
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, I certainly think that
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 should be learned a lot of lessons after they have done
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unpaid
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service
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. Again, in my experience, it was
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 great
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 that I've ever had before. There are several advantages of
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 activity.
Firstly
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,
students
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 can have a caring mind. I
also
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 thought of others more without a price after doing volunteer work.
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, it should be
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helpful work for
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society. When the activity is about to
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 up
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,
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 can make our
homegrounds
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home grounds
 more clear. I know still there are many parents who do not like these kinds of volunteer activities because of their children's study
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.
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, doing unpaid
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service
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's advantages outweigh
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. It is more important
that
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 a great warm-hearted person than a smarter person. In conclusion, because of these reasons, it seems to me that high schools should
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put unpaid
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 services as a compulsory part of subjects.
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