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Nowadays it is easy to apply for and be given a credit card. However, some people experience problems when they are not be able to pay their debts back.

#credit #card #people #debts
credit
card
 is becoming
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stuff that
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it
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for granted
to
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most
of
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people
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the people
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 .
However
 , it would become
an
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 charged
issue
 that some
people
 are over
comsumption
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consumption
 . in my opinion , the advantage of
credit
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a credit
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cart
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card
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 overweight the disadvantage. on the one hand ,
credit
 is
good
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 way for some
people
temporarily
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who temporarily
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lack
of
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money to deal with some financial
issue
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. if
people
 want to buy something
such
like
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a house or a car which
lack
of
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sufficient money ,
credit
 car is useful for
people
 .
some time
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,
credit
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card
 is
good
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 way to solve some financial
issue
which
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people
 on unemployment have to pay
expendture
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expenditure
expenditures
 of living .
on the other hand
 ,
credit
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card
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 can
led
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people
 to fall
into
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the risk of debt
who
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lack
of
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self-controlled. it does not news that lots of humanity
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running
runned
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 out of their
credited
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,because of the over
expendture
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expenditure
 on something they want . one of
main
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reason
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reasons
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of
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overspending
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over spending
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 is to pay their debt back after
people
 have
borrow
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 something for a month . it
make
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people
lack
of
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real sense when they pay off the money and
further
 lead to
the
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overspending
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over spending
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. lasting the action of
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over spending
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 for
long
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 term would cause a big financial
issue
 . overall , I think that the advantage of
credit
card
 overweigh the disadvantage , but the
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government
goverment
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government
 and
company
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companies
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 should give a correct lecture for some
people
.
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