In many parts of the world today there is a profitable market for products which lighten or whiten people’s skin. Outline the reasons for using such products and discuss what effect they have in terms of health on society?

There are many
people
that
uses
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such
kind
of creams which make them white and
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shiny
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shinny
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shiny
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. These
products
have different
side
effects on
skin
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the skin
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. we will discuss
about
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skin
products
and their
side
effect in
this
essay and
alsi
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also
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will share my point of view.
First
, companies make
different
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a different
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type
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types
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of items which change their
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appearance
apperance
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appearance
and make their
skin
white. There are many creams, lotions etc that have different chemicals in their product which make them change.
For example
, most
people
who afford that
kind
of product , purchase them and use them and later they become change their
skin
colour,
people
use bleach on their
skin
to make them white. These
products
are
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by rich
people
who can afford them easily
otherwise
poor
people
don't have importance
these
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this kind
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kind
of items.
Secondly
, these
products
may have
bad
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a bad
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effect on society, these things have different
side
effects on
skin
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the skin
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,
sometimes
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and sometimes
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bleach on
skin
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the skin
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may produce
ellergic
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allergic
or rashes that
looks
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skin
bad.
for example
, that
kind
of creams have harmful chemicals and when they apply
on
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skin
after
sometime
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they
faces
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problems like spots on
skin
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the skin
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and make them ugly. In my
opinion
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we should stay away
these
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harmful
products
. In conclusion, these things have
bad
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a bad
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impact on
community
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the community
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and their
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people
poeple
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people
.
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people
poeple
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People
should accept what they are, companies
makes
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profit
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a profit
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of
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such
dangerous things and sell them for their benefit. most
people
are
fool
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a fool
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and buy from them and apply on their natural
skin
which they
faces
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side
effect later.
As a result
, we get to know that
these
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kind
of
products
nothing
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are nothing
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but a waste of money.
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