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Nowadays there is a trend of rapid increase in already excessive use of natural resources such as oil, forest and fresh water. What dangers does it bring? What are the possible solutions to address these issues?

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Dr M McLaren Neurologist Suite 3 67 Cresent Newtown 4 October 2022 RE: Mr Michael Weir, DOB: 20 September 1970 Dear Dr McLaren, Thank you for seeing Mr Weir, who has recurrent left leg weakness. He was suspected of multiple sclerosis and will be needing your expertise and assessment. He intially presented on 29/06/2014 with complaints of feeling stress accompanied by sluggishness in his movements and tiredness. He has a long history of increased BMI. Apparently, his cholesterol level is 6.37 mmol/L.
In addition
, his CBC result shows that he had a low WBC, RBC, Hb, Hct, respectively. He was
then
 advised to change his lifesytle
such
 as smoking cessation, trimmings of his weight, cholesterol and saturated fat levels.
Further
, to execute regular exercise. Currently, there is still sensation of stress and had recent two blackouts, with few minutes apart. He has mood swings since his
last
 visit at the clinic and had cascade of symptoms
such
 as breathlessness, intermittent constipation and lack of energy.
Although
 he was been trying to consume better foods and increase his physical activity, he still smokes cigarettes. There is significant weight loss of 1.8kgs after a month,
however
, there is upper extremities sensational loss and dimished reflex particularly on left patellar. He has had depression since 2012 for which he takes Zoloft. It is appreciated if you could do a thorough neurological assessment to Mr Weir to rule out MS. Please order a head and lumbar spinal CT central or spinal to determine the cause of the aforementioned symptoms. Please consider
also
 a MRI for definitive imaging. If you have any questions, do not hesitate to contact me. Yours sincerely, Nurse
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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