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Every year several language die out. Some people think this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages. To what extent do u agree or disagree with this opinion.

#year #language #people #life #languages
All countries in the world have
themselves
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their
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 mother
language
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languages
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 and some of them vanish every year. There are some
people
 who believe that life will be convenient without several languages. I completely disagree, because the
language
 is part of a culture and
tourist
 industry.
First
, the
language
 is significant for each country and it is part of its culture. If
mother
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the mother
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 tongue
being
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is
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 removed from
a
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land, it will cause making
relationship
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relationships
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 will be hard
to
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for
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people
.
For instance
, the old
people
 can not speak to other
people
 because they are used to speak by their homeland’s
language
in
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for
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 whole their life
therefore
, it is not
easily
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easy
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 for them to learn
new
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a new
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language
.
On the other hand
, their culture will be destroyed and
people
 like to keep their civilization by having their special
themselves
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apply
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language
. The
second
 reason is that
,
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apply
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type
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the type
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 of dialogue between
people
 in a community
it
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apply
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is a portion of their
tourist
industrial
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industry
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.
For example
, speaking Japanese is interesting for
every one
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everyone
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 who takes travel to Japan,
as a result
, if
this
language
die
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dies
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 out, it will be
disadvantage
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a disadvantage
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 for
business
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the business
a business
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 of
tourist
 attraction in
this
 country
then
it
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its
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 negative effect on their
economic
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economy
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. In conclusion, some
people
 agree with being
limited
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a limited
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 number of languages in the world, and they think can live easily
by
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with
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 a few languages. I disagree with them
,
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apply
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 because it makes many
of
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apply
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cultures undergo change
also
, it causes the fewer
tourist
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tourists
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go
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to go
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 to visit that community
then
 earning income from
business
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the business
a business
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 of
tourist
 will be decreased.
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