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Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There has been much discussion revolving around the issue of whether it is more beneficial to educate boys and girls in separate
schools
 or in mixed ones. In
this
 essay, I will explain both views and give my own opinion. The primary factor we need to take into consideration is that boys and girls must be educated in mixed
schools
. It is the twenty-
first
 century, the modern age, the time when tolerance is one of the most important
society’s
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 values. In educational institutions, children must be taught not only science, the school must be a place where a person's personality is formed comprehensively. When boys and girls study together, they learn a lot about the opposite sex,
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 to interact with each other, and in process of
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 they are gaining a lot of important social skills that they will need later in their adult lives.
In contrast
, some
other
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 may claim that it is more beneficial for children to learn in separate
schools
. It is much easier to maintain order in the culture of
behavior
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 by following
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the school’s
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school’s
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 rules in a strict way by students in
such
schools
. It is easier for teachers to get used to the students, and it is easier to manage them when there are individuals of the same gender sitting in the classroom. Having considered both views, I think the priority for the parents should be to send their children to learn in mixed
schools
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • co-education
  • gender segregation
  • peer pressure
  • academic performance
  • gender stereotypes
  • discrimination
  • social skills
  • teamwork
  • collaboration
  • diversity
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