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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Many people assume that the goal of every country should be to produce more materials and goods. To what extent do you agree or disagree that constantly increasing production is an appropriate goal? You should write at least 250 words.

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Would the production of more items be beneficial to the government? It has been constantly argued that the rate of manufacturing of
products
 should be improved. I personally agree
to
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 the statement due to the reasons outlined below.
Firstly
, it is a fact that the population of the world is growing exponentially. The birth rates of many countries around the world have increased rapidly in the past decade, leading to many households buying more
products
. Companies would have to speed up the manufacturing process in order for the demands of customers to be met.
For example
, it has been observed that the population of people per unit area has doubled during the past decade.
Hence
, suppliers would have to keep up with the purchase trends of the general public. The production of more items would
also
 cause an increased GDP within a certain country.
This
 would primarily be because of the increased supply of
products
 to the people which would lead to more units being sold per day. Selling more
products
 brings more sales to a company based in a certain country, in return attracting more capital to the government. There have been many instances where people have switched to other brands when stocks run out. In simpler words, manufacturing an increased number of
products
 would thereby
increasing
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 a country's worth. To sum up, I agree that governments would benefit from an increased rate of production due to the rapid growth in population as well as boosting GDP.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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