In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message ?

It must be admitted that achieving the major dreams in life
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by working hard and trying enough. In some countries
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it is advisable for young people to try several times in
order
to achieve whatever they want. Here are the possible pros and cons of
this
concept. On the one hand, children may make a huge effort to reach a wrong goal
that is
not suitable for them. That could happen because of their limited knowledge of available choices or even get confused among them.
For example
, when it comes to sports if teenagers select a specific game that requires
skills
they do not have, they would probably fail no matter how much they will practice.
Nevertheless
, if the matured populations
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in youth minds that working smartly and hard will pay off for them in more convenient ways than they have planned, they would be more activated and productive as well.
On the other hand
, looking back at all the great things that mankind has achieved, we will see that they come out of huge efforts altogether. Take,
for instance
, the famous football player Mohamed salah, he was an ordinary player but he decided to be the best in the world. In
order
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, he followed
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path using his efforts, and
skills
and he
also
studied the game. It said that he has succeeded because he did not depend only on physical
skills
and working seriously but
also
on his cognitive
skills
. In conclusion, in
order
to meet certain wants and dreams, teens have to select their plans carefully and follow them consistently, and
also
increased efforts made in
order
to be successful.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • achieve
  • try hard
  • positive mindset
  • self-belief
  • motivates
  • ambitious goals
  • resilience
  • determination
  • confidence
  • self-esteem
  • growth mindset
  • unrealistic expectations
  • disappointment
  • failure
  • effort
  • hard work
  • seek support
  • individual differences
  • abilities
  • capabilities
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