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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both vies and give your own opinion.

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The curriculum of universities has become a subject of debate in recent years. It is argued that
students
 should be free to
study
 whatever they want while many people consider that universities should confine
subjects
 which are related to science and technology. In my opinion, it is better to let college
students
 learn majors suiting their passion. The essay will analyse both sides of
this
 view to clarify the conclusion. On the one hand, only allowing
students
 to learn useful
subjects
 regarding artificial intelligence and science is supported by many members of society due to the development of these fields.
For example
, the global technological conglomerates,
such
 as Tik Tok, Facebook and Netflix, have developed rapidly so it moves in tandem with the spectacular demands for labour. It can be seen that studying
subjects
 related to these will help university graduates to find employment easily.
However
, just a certain number of people have the ability to
study
 these and those, who can not, will find it difficult to gain knowledge and manage hardly to graduate.
Thus
,
this
 makes it hard to support.
On the other hand
, some members of the public believe that
students
 should freely choose what major they want to learn because
this
 will create motivation both in studying and working in the future.
For instance
, a survey in Vietnam showed that almost Vietnamese
students
 consider that learning the
subjects
 they like will help them to focus on their major classes and have opportunities to work in these fields after graduating. It is clear that
this
 motivates
students
 to work hard in a productive way.
Therefore
, it is necessary for university
students
 to
study
 whatever they want. In conclusion,
although
 many think that confining the curriculum into some useful
subjects
 will benefit college
students
, I strongly believe that they should be allowed to
study
 anything they like.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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