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The climograph below shows average monthly temperatures and rainfall in the city of Kolkata. What do you thing about the situation with weather in the world?

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The graph shows us a
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climate-changing
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climate changing
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 tendency of Kolkata. It
use
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 the numbers of average monthly temperatures and rainfall for description.
Firstly
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, we can see that summer is the most
raining
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 season of the year in Kolkata. The
level
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 of rainfall rapidly
increase
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 starting from June. And it hit the top point of rains in July. After that, starting from August
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 rainfall ratio goes down to the lowest point in December.
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, it is clear, that winter is the driest period of the year in the city. Nextly, regarding the
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, we can see the difference. The hottest month of the year is May.
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 trend
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 the
temperature
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 starts
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 January. And goes up
repidly
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rapidly
 to the ratio of May. After that, the
temperature
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decrease
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 smoothly till August. From August to September we
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can
ccan
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can
 see the plateau of the
temperature
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level
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. By the end, from September to December the
level
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 of
temperature
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 goes down in a logical way with the lowest point in January. To sum up, Spring is the hottest season in the city of Kolkata with
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 hottest
month
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. And Summer is
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 season with
highest
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the highest
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level
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 of
rains
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rain
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