Some people believe that not all criminals should be kept in prison, but that some of them should be allowed to do unpaid work to help the community. Do you agree or disagree?

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be a fantastic approach if the government

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categories of criminals and

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out some of them who did not

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any serious

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as murder. Since people have different views a majority of the masses are in favour

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for volunteering

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but others believe that unpaid work for the community is a good way and I agree with those who are in favour of providing jobs to offenders. On the one hand, a number of people consider that not every criminal has been involved in a serious crime. Giving them some opportunities to do free work for nationals can lead them toward a new path

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authorities can test their behaviour like how they communicate with other people, in

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they can become better citizens after completing their prison.

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done in a prison in India, in which they organized community activities and invited thousands of nationals to join them and all offenders were serving the guests as waiters.

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, the government had a chance to watch the all criminals and they reduced the sentence of a lot of law-breakers because of watching their superior deeds in that organized party.

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, several others emphasise that

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can put the lives of citizens in danger because no one knows how they will react immediately after release from jail. There are plenty of chances that not only they will try to escape from the organized event but

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they can harm or kill the citizens if they find something which they can use as a weapon like a knife. The reason is there will be hundreds of nationals in the group so it will

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be hard to find offenders in case they change their dress. In conclusion,

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that it is very risky to offer volunteering jobs to law-breakers, I am in favour of those who think that the best way to reduce crime is

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a chance to criminals and see if they improve and try to become good residents.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

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351 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

rehabilitation
incarceration
non-violent crimes
overcrowding
reoffending rates
judicial discretion
alternative punishments
public funds
community service
petty theft
vandalism
punitive measures
social reintegration
deterrence
minor offenses

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