Some people believe that not all criminals should be kept in prison, but that some of them should be allowed to do unpaid work to help the community. Do you agree or disagree?
It
will
be a fantastic approach if the government Wrong verb form
would
make
categories of criminals and Wrong verb form
made
find
out some of them who did not Wrong verb form
found
made
any serious Verb problem
commit
crime
Fix the agreement mistake
crimes
such
as murder. Since people have different views a majority of the masses are in favour to release
for volunteering Change preposition
of releasing
job
but others believe that unpaid work for the community is a good way and I agree with those who are in favour of providing jobs to offenders.
On the one hand, a number of people consider that not every criminal has been involved in a serious crime. Giving them some opportunities to do free work for nationals can lead them toward a new path Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
as well
as
authorities can test their behaviour like how they communicate with other people, in Correct word choice
and
this
way
they can become better citizens after completing their prison. Add a comma
way,
For example
, a survey had been
done in a prison in India, in which they organized community activities and invited thousands of nationals to join them and all offenders were serving the guests as waiters. Wrong verb form
was
As a result
, the government had a chance to watch the all criminals and they reduced the sentence of a lot of law-breakers because of watching their superior deeds in that organized party.
On the other hand
, several others emphasise that this
can put the lives of citizens in danger because no one knows how they will react immediately after release from jail. There are plenty of chances that not only they will try to escape from the organized event but also
they can harm or kill the citizens if they find something which they can use as a weapon like a knife. The reason is there will be hundreds of nationals in the group so it will also
be hard to find offenders in case they change their dress.
In conclusion, although
one assure
that it is very risky to offer volunteering jobs to law-breakers, I am in favour of those who think that the best way to reduce crime is Wrong verb form
is assured
giving
a chance to criminals and see if they improve and try to become good residents.Wrong verb form
to give them
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