Many people say that universities should only offer places to young students with the highest marks, while others say they should accept people of all ages, even if they did not do well at school. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
To pursue the dream of being successful, people always think studying at
university
is the only way to be succeed
. But there is a problem rising among citizens. It is studying at Change the verb form
succeed
university
is only for students
with flying marks
at school
, the others suppose that studying at university
is for everyone at every age despite they are not educated or had a good perform
at Replace the word
performance
school
. In m point of view, university
is a development area for all Add an article
the university
kind
of people Fix the agreement mistake
kinds
not
just remarkable Add the comma(s)
,not
students
. Having a widen
Replace the word
wide
knowledge
before get
into Change the verb form
getting
university
is an advantage for everyone because university
is an academic place, Add an article
the university
every
argument or subjects Correct word choice
and every
need
to have the exact information in it. But having flying Correct subject-verb agreement
needs
marks
does not mean having a widen
Replace the word
wide
knowledge
. The knowledge
at high school
is limited, every student can easily get high marks
. But the opposite is true when you are in university
. Knowledge
in university
is extremely wide, it is not easy for a person to get maximum points. One more certain thing is teachers in high school
nowadays can help students
increase their marks
so students
can easily get high scores without hard studying. As I mentioned before, university
is an environment for Add an article
the university
academic
, but not only Fix the agreement mistake
academics
academic
. Fix the agreement mistake
academics
University
is also
a place to improve lots of life skills. To illustrate this
opinion, presentation is the work that every students
in Change to a singular noun
student
university
have to do once. While presenting, you can both revise the lesson you learned and improve your public speaking skill, in
which will help you in finding jobs in future. Another reason is in Change preposition
apply
university
, the time you were a freshman you will learn all basic
lessons of your career. So having flying Correct article usage
the basic
marks
at high school
is meaningless Correct your spelling
because
beacuse
Correct your spelling
because
in
Add the comma(s)
,in
university
, you have the same starting point as others. In conclusion, studying at university
is a big chance for anyone who want
to pursue their career, not just for young Change the verb form
wants
students
with highest
Correct article usage
the highest
marks
. University
is a tool for everyone, a short way to get to their dream.Submitted by trancaomaitrang on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite