Some believe that the best way to stay fit is to join a gym or health club while others think doing everyday activities such as walking and climbing stairs is enough. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Nowadays, having
a
Correct article usage
apply
health
and keeping fit become a significant topic
. Some believe going to Fix the agreement mistake
topics
gyms
is perfect
solution to keep in shape, while others say it is enough to do daily activities. Add an article
the perfect
a perfect
This
essay will discuss the debate and give a conclusion view.
On the one hand, those who support the idea of going to health
clubs
to have a health
and fit Replace the word
healthy
body
claim that people should exercise
with coaches. It seems that coaches can teach athletes how to exercise
in correct
wayAdd an article
the correct
a correct
,
because if they do not Remove the comma
apply
exercise
correctly, they will hurt
. Add a missing verb
be hurt
For example
, some wrong movements can be traumatized to spinal
column. Add an article
the spinal
Furthermore
, proponents of joining gyms
for fitness promote that being present in sport
Change the noun form
sports
clubs
may prevent from
depression and increase self-confidence. Indeed, people who suffer from obesity introduce those Change preposition
apply
Correct pronoun usage
who hade
hade
Correct your spelling
have
same
problems and could become in shape by Correct article usage
the same
exercise
, so they will be hopeful and will not think they are alone and abominate Correct pronoun usage
their
they
bodies. To supporters of Correct your spelling
the
this
idea, these benefits are convincing.
On the other hand
, opponents of going to sport
Change the noun form
sports
clubs
to keep fit cite that it is not economical
choice. Add an article
an economical
In other words
, athletes should pay fees whereas there many
people that are not able to pay tuition. Add a missing verb
are many
For instance
, workers with low incomes can not devote part of their income to pay gyms
fees because they will confront financial problems, so doing everyday activities like walking or climbing stairs can be Change the noun form
gym
suitable
choice for them. Add an article
a suitable
the suitable
Moreover
, critics also
highlight everybody do
not have access to Change the verb form
does
health
clubs
and have
to take a long way to the gym. Correct subject-verb agreement
has
For example
, there are Correct your spelling
no
not
Correct your spelling
no
gyms
in villages, so villagers should spend a long distance and time to arrive to
Change preposition
at
gyms
in cities. Therefore
, they prefer to do daily activities as
Correct quantifier usage
such as
exercise
. This
argument also
appears to be quite powerful.
In conclusion, I would tend to side with proponents of joining a gym. It seems that exercise
should be done beside a master mentor in order to prevent the
possible Correct article usage
apply
body
damages
. Fix the agreement mistake
damage
Although
it has high costs, healthy
and fit Correct article usage
a healthy
body
can hold back paying money to cure ill
Correct article usage
an ill
body
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