Some believe that the best way to stay fit is to join a gym or health club while others think doing everyday activities such as walking and climbing stairs is enough. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, having
a
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health
and keeping fit become a significant
topic
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. Some believe going to
gyms
is
perfect
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the perfect
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solution to keep in shape, while others say it is enough to do daily activities.
This
essay will discuss the debate and give a conclusion view. On the one hand, those who support the idea of going to
health
clubs
to have a
health
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and fit
body
claim that people should
exercise
with coaches. It seems that coaches can teach athletes how to
exercise
in
correct
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the correct
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way
,
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because if they do not
exercise
correctly, they will
hurt
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.
For example
, some wrong movements can be traumatized to
spinal
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column.
Furthermore
, proponents of joining
gyms
for fitness promote that being present in
sport
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clubs
may prevent
from
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depression and increase self-confidence. Indeed, people who suffer from obesity introduce those
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who hade
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hade
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same
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problems and could become in shape by
exercise
, so they will be hopeful and will not think they are alone and abominate
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their
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they
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bodies. To supporters of
this
idea, these benefits are convincing.
On the other hand
, opponents of going to
sport
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clubs
to keep fit cite that it is not
economical
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an economical
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choice.
In other words
, athletes should pay fees whereas there
many
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people that are not able to pay tuition.
For instance
, workers with low incomes can not devote part of their income to pay
gyms
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fees because they will confront financial problems, so doing everyday activities like walking or climbing stairs can be
suitable
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a suitable
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choice for them.
Moreover
, critics
also
highlight everybody
do
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not have access to
health
clubs
and
have
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has
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to take a long way to the gym.
For example
, there are
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no
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not
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gyms
in villages, so villagers should spend a long distance and time to arrive
to
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gyms
in cities.
Therefore
, they prefer to do daily activities
as
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exercise
.
This
argument
also
appears to be quite powerful. In conclusion, I would tend to side with proponents of joining a gym. It seems that
exercise
should be done beside a master mentor in order to prevent
the
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possible
body
damages
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.
Although
it has high costs,
healthy
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and fit
body
can hold back paying money to cure
ill
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an ill
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body
.
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