More and more wild animals are on the verge of extinction and others are on the endangered list. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this problem?

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Nowadays, a large number of
animals
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are being diminished or even vanished. In
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essay, I will discuss the cause of
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social issue and how to solve it. To commence with, it is irrefutable that the environmental problem known as
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is the biggest reason
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animals'
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extinction.
Climate
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has slowly destroyed forests. Due to the destruction of wildlife
habitat
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, numerous
animals
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lose their homes. The most representative case would be the polar bear. Owing to the melting of Arctic ice, they have lost their habitat and drowned to death. Not only
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but
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immoderate hunting is
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a big reason
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making
animals
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endangered. It is actually forbidden by law in many countries.
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, Japan strictly prohibits
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whale hunting to protect
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population of them, which has been severely reduced by excessive hunting.
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, there are still solutions to solve the problem of protecting endangered
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, the government should legislate the
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law. It is obvious that severe punishment can prevent people to harm
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, the government have to run a protection organization. In
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project, people in
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create a makeshift habitat for endangered
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until their population will have been getting recovered. To sum up, the reasons
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extincted
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extinct
or endangered
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are
bacause
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because
of
Climate
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and
over-hunting
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.
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, in order to solve the problem, the most important factor is the active involvement of the government.
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is because only encouraging at the national level leads to the participation of many people.
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