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Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person’s culture and character from their choice of clothes.

#people #person’s #culture #character #choice #clothes
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World
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 is divided
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 large different
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culture
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cultures
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 and traditions. These days
public
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a public
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 debate has been going on possible to judge
about
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a
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person
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person's
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culture
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 and
characteristic
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characteristics
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 from their sense of
dressing
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. In
this
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 essay, I will explain why clothing
is not describe
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 a
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person
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person's
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character
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 and
culture
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.
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, every country has different weather in the world and all of them have
different
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a different
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outfit
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outfits
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. A
person
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 generally wares
the
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apply
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garments
depends
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 on the weather,
where
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and where
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 he lived. If a
person
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lived
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living
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 in the European
countries
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country
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, where he preferred to use
coat
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a coat
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 in his daily routine life to protect himself from
cold
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the cold
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 climate. In
same
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the same
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 way who lived in hot weather like the Arabian
countries
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,countries
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they
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apply
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preferred to use white rob called thobe to protect themself from
sun’s
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ray
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rays
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. So, from the above examples
its
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it's
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 quite difficult to describe
individual
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an individual
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character
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characters
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 from the clothing sense.
Secondly
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, Large commercial company’s people are wearing their
uniform
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uniforms
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 where they can showcase their own company branding, safety, and status.
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, my younger brother is working with Reliance Industries, they have compulsory to wore
uniform
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a uniform
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, which is
navy
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a navy
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 blue shirt and dark blue paint.
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,
same
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the same
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 way for different county military troops has
own
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their own
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uniform
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uniforms
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 with
same
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color
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 and pattern for all individuals only they are segregated with their work responsibilities.
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, in both cases, we cannot judge the
culture
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 and
character
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 of individuals as both have
wearing
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to wear
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 their own appearance. A
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person
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person's
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 choice of clothing cannot always be used as a reflection of their
character
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 in general. In summary, a
person
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’s style of dressing would not be an indicator of their thought patterns, and outlook towards life and
culture
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 I believe is soundly based on the above reasoning I have presented.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • garments
  • traditional attire
  • sartorial choices
  • expressive style
  • cultural identity
  • psychological implications
  • non-verbal cues
  • globalization
  • perceptions
  • professional demeanor
  • societal norms
  • economic constraints
  • subcultures
  • fashion movements
  • individualism
  • stereotype
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