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the best way to make the road transport of goods safer is to ask drivers to take a driving test each year

#road #transport #goods #drivers #test #year
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economic prosperity in any country is having a strong transit system and road transport plays a very important role in
this
 field. In order to make them safer, different
rules
such
 as annual driving tests are needed.
This
 essay will explain my view on
This
 given topic. After driving for many years, it is natural that individuals may forget certain
rules
 and a course to refresh their driving knowledge is necessary. In some
countries
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 drivers need to take a driving test each year, and
although
 it is necessary, it is not perfect. Having a safer transportation system depend on several conditions.
First
 of all, Roads should be built based on engineering principles and
in addition
 to having enough road signs, they are
also
 placed in appropriate locations.
secondly
, Truck drivers must be checked for physical and health conditions periodically and driving tests should be taken every year but in my opinion ,these inspections are not required for car operators
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 impose a lot of costs on the government
For example
, in Iran car chauffeurs need to apply once every five years.
On the other hand
, following traffic
rules
 plays an important role in road transport and should start from childhood so education and culturalization are
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basic parts of
this
 field. The safety and security of vehicles ,airbags, anti-break systems,forward collision warnings and etc,are other important items in the transportation industry. For instance ,Mercedes-Benz company announces in one of its advertisements, you may make a mistake while driving, but we will save your life. To sum up,
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annual driving test is necessary, having a safe transportation system needs more steps. Following the
rules
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 safety and culturalization complement each other.
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