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Some people say that now we can see films on our phone or tables there is no need to go cinema. Other say that to be fully enjoyed films need to seen in a cinema. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people say that now we can see films on our phone or tables there is no need to go cinema. Other say that to be fully enjoyed films need to seen in a cinema. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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Nowadays people have various options to enjoy
movies
. The debate has been going on around the world that, people can watch
the
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movies
 on their own
devices
 instated of visiting
to
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cinema others
thinking
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 that
to enjoy
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the films theater
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 is the only option. I will explain my viewpoint
into
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below
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the below
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 listed paragraph. To
be commence
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 with
personal
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the personal
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device
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 is
the
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 basic need for humans and it has unlimited data
plan
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 available to use the internet.
In
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a result
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result
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 they can download or
view
 media over
the
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personal
devices
 anytime
with
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 their own convince and they can
also
 pause and
fast forward
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 the clips.
For instance
, any person
travel
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to
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holidays
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 and
he
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has
long
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a long
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 layover
over
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 the airport so
he
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can spend time
by
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watching
movies
 on his personal handset.
Furthermore
, there is
wide
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 range of collections available over the internet without spending any cost. There is
also
 adverse effect which
impact
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 to human eyes body
while
view
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viewing
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movies
 using
the
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small
devices
.
In contrast
, visiting
to
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auditorium allowed
audience
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the audience
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 to boost different
experience
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experiences
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 they can enjoy the shooting, dolly sound, actions and on
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a wide
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wide screen
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widescreen
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 with large relaxation chairs.
For example
,
size
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the size
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 of the screen and sound quality make appreciate to
film makers
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filmmakers
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 for different elements of the clips like shooting location,
dialogs
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dialogues
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, characters and many more. Some
of
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the
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individuals are fascinated about the
view
 first show of the releases and make
advance
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an advance
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 booking prior which make extra expense on
individual’s
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 budgets.
To conclude
 viewing
movies
 on
the
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small
devices
cost effective
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 and have various section to
view
 as per personal convince,
However
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theaters
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theatres
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 are costly and
only
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 specific option
available
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 for which customer bought tickets so it seems
cost effective
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 option is suitable for me rather than spending
large
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a large
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 amount.
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