"Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization" What could be the disadvantages and advantages of self-employed?

There are varying opinions regarding the preferences of self-employed people rather than working for any fellowship.
Although
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both advantages and
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downsides I lean a little bit toward
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rather than doing activities for any organization. One obvious upside of working for oneself is you are your own boss. While working for yourself you can carry out and supervise work,
besides
make any changes you want in any period. Another perk of
self-employed
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is it has not any restrictions in generally
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.
Thus
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the period of working no one lay off or
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redundant,
moreover
, you can
also
retire whenever you desire. Despite the above-discussed positives, I would contend disadvantages of working for yourself as follows inability to feel responsible. Considering
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,
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is not able to climb the career ladder.
Furthermore
,
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job does not contain formality as company or government work as.
Therefore
, it would not embraces seniority. To conclude, analysing all of these, despite self-employed has some difficulties
such
as tax, informality or something like
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, working for oneself contains
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benefits
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career, a stimulating work environment and huge incomes
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if you are really being in and doing that job in the correct position.
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  • self-employment
  • independence
  • entrepreneurship
  • overheads
  • global markets
  • niche audiences
  • work-life balance
  • flexible hours
  • traditional employment
  • entrepreneurial culture
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