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Some people work for the same organisation all their lives.Others think it is better to work for different organisations.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

While working for the same
company
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 or different companies is a matter of choice, it has its own advantages and disadvantages.
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 essay will throw some light on both views along with my opinion. In my opinion, working for the same institution has its own benefits. People who work for the same
organisation
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, enjoy many perks and rewards bestowed upon them, for their loyalty and contribution to the
company
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.
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, they have job security which leaves them satisfied with their job.
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, they are able to give their best which helps the
company
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 in the long-term survival in the industry.
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, sometimes working in the same
organisation
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 leads to monotony, and often kills the creativity of an individual, which harms both the employee and the
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 in the long run. Working for different organisations has its own benefits.
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, the person can learn so much from his new job in a different
organisation
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 which leads to upskilling and improves the worker's chances of getting a promotion and much better career progression.
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,
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 too comes at a cost. The worker sometimes is unable to adjust to the new
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, owing to differences in the work culture. To conclude, both approaches have their own advantages and disadvantages ,
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however
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 the benefits of working in different organisations far outweigh the advantages of working in the same
organisation
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. So, in my opinion, a person should always aspire to work with different organisations as it brings out the best in that individual.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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